On the eve of the championship baseball game, our player was practicing by himself. Many of his friends had come to give him advice during the week on what he needed to do to be prepared for the game at the end of the week. The player had many friends from other schools who came to give him advice on what to do. Many of his friends said to take 100 extra swings before the game. Others would say he needed to take so many ground balls for practice. Some told him to get plenty hours of sleep. Others said he needed to eat healthy so he would be well fed for the game. Our player took all these things into consideration. He wanted to be the best player for his team so that they would have a great chance to win the championship game.
He took over 100 extra swings. He took extra ground balls. He made sure he ate well, and that he got plenty of sleep. The player listened to all the advice he had been given except for one person’s advice. The person’s advice he didn’t listen to was the advice of a player from a rival high school. The player from the rival high school had told him that he didn’t need to take any extra swings. He didn’t need to take any extra ground balls. He didn’t need to get any extra hours of sleep. Also he didn’t need to eat well. He told our player that he was already so good that he didn’t need to do anything. The rival wanted to sabotage our player because our player and his team had beat the rival’s team out of the game before. Our player knew that he didn’t need to listen to his rival. His rival was trying to hurt him and his team. Our player decided he wasn’t going to listen to his rival, he was going to listen to his friends and family who all wanted him and his team to succeed. The moral of this story is that you need to be wary of the advice of some people because their motives may not always be pure.
Author’s Note: For this story I change the setting and the characters quite a bit. In the original fable, the Greek god Zeus is getting married. All the animals bring gifts. A snake brings a gift in his mouth. Zeus said he wouldn’t accept his gift because he didn’t trust the snake. The moral of the original fable is favors of wicked people are frightening. I made the setting a modern scene of taking place on Olympus. Instead of a wedding of the gods, I made my story about a championship baseball game. Also I changed the characters from Zeus and animals to real people.
Bibliography: Aesop's Fables. A new translation by Laura Gibbs. Oxford University Press (World's Classics): Oxford, 2002. Link to the story.
Bibliography: Aesop's Fables. A new translation by Laura Gibbs. Oxford University Press (World's Classics): Oxford, 2002. Link to the story.
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ReplyDeleteI like that you completely changed the story from what it originally was into something completely different.That makes the story unique to you. It is really interesting and a good story. The moral of the story is really great, because you can't always listen to everyone's advice. Some people want to hurt you. I think that your story is well written! I like it!
ReplyDeleteI liked that you retold the story using elements that interest your own life. From your introduction, you’re an avid baseball fan and here, you use that in an intelligent way. It was really creative to make the story more contemporary through athletics rather than a mythical wedding full of talking animals. It makes me wish that I would have been more creative with my own story.
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